@john-m
Yes, much better now – you put more work in this one. 
Like @rrblint, I also didn’t change any colour. Suppose, the reddish tone appears stronger with a darker face.
Straightening the pic and working with so many Local Adjustments became really tough. It took long to load the pic and ages with LA active.
When correcting masks manually, it happened several times that I moved the ‘start button’ by mistake and so the mask – quite annoying. And next time I’ll use less CPs.
What I don’t get, how to remove the top right black corner. I tried with copy and repair, but never get a clean replacement. Does it have to do with touching the edge of the pic? No problem to repair something as long it doesn’t touch the side.
Today I thought to export the image with its corrections as Tiff-file and try again with a few LAs. – That’s speeding up the process and no more waiting for the screen to finish rendering!
So, for me it was a training about what can be done in PL. Normally I do dodge & burn in PS and therefore use a Wacom tablet – difficult in PL.
have fun, Wolfgang